Movie Poster I Designed (and screenplay i wrote too!)

[mikezilla]

So this would go in 2d art... but its a far more interesting topic than that. As i'm [for the first time] putting one of my screenplays online. I didn't want it to die (after I was so UNFAIRLY borked out of project greenlight... which is a different story.) So I did a cool little movie poster, took like two hours.

The link to the screenplay is, its a full length so it should take you like an hour to read if you're willing. Hopefully this will give you more of an idea as to why I moved into the realm of full time writer. Oh and before anyone asks "what if somebody steals it?" You cant. It's registered through the WGA and is copyrighted.

http://www.mikezilla.net/secret/suicidethursday.txt

since this is such a dear thing to me, i'd HIGHLY appreciate email feedback for the nitty gritty and the normal feedback can just go in the thread.

miken@gearboxsoftware.com

and the poster, i'm sorry if your name sorta randomly appears on it. i just wanted to fill up the space with names that couldn't sue me.

enjoy.

[JynxDaddy]

THe poster is cool :D I'll get around to reading the screenplay.....later

[Guest John Kerry]

<3 the poster... but thats alot to sit and read right now... maybe later

[madcow]

looks very reserviour dogs..red background, different colours on the shirts...

reading thru it now, so far its pretty damned good

[GrayFox]

looks very reserviour dogs

I'll read it later.

[madcow]

awesome

thats a really good story - i especially like the start, its very clever i did notice a few spelling errors here and there but yeah

cant wait to see it as a movie

[Skjalg]

yeah, what madcow said...

id also like to add that i really liked the start too, very.. cool

BUT, towards the middle and end, it all gets very predictable :/ but all in all, a very nice movie.. alot better than many ive seen...

i dont know what you could've done to change the predictableness, but maybe its just me beeing a noob Dont take me seriously

[Mazy]

hmm prolly gonna read it when i get home

[kleinluka]

I didn't want it to die (after I was so UNFAIRLY borked out of project greenlight... which is a different story.)

WE WANT DETAILS!!!!!

[Duff-e]

yes details

[DD]

I'm SUEING YOU~!!!@ You put my name on a poster that reminds me of Ocean Twelve, the new ELEVEN! SUE SUE! I'll read the script latah~

[mikezilla]

well their voting system is based on three scores they pull at random from all the scores you got. All scores are from other people in the contest. Anyway I got a perfect score and like five REALLY high ones, and one low, and one ZERO. Now i'm not chill to the rules, but if you're judging a contest and you get a screenplay, and you "don't get it" DONT SUBMIT A VOTE. Anyway, they pull scores at random, so that zero and that low score went in, not my perfect or my high ones...

so i got knocked first round on a technicality of a crappy contest.

they should fix that.

[FrieChamp]

I will probably take a further read later too, but something which caught my eye was the phone ringing after the girl woke up. That sounds like the thousands of other movies with characters waking up, seeing a mess in the room and then in perfect timing the parents call. The girl could be woken up by the phone, or need some time to find the phone in the big mess.

Just a suggestion

[Guest The_Postman]

William Butler Yeats did your music?

[TomWithTheWeather]

Looks like a heist flick.